Tuesday, April 28, 2009

Fighting For the Freedom

I decided I need to practice writing songs with what I have learned so far to cement it even further. This song idea came as I have been pondering who my audience will be, and what it is I have to say. I believe I need to write to the youth to buoy them up in these difficult days so they can choose the right though it may be hard, and to be leaders in truth righteousness, and virtue.
Here are the notes I took as I pondered where this song should go.
a) freedom to choose who we want to be
b) freedom to choose our own values and then to stick to it without worry about others opinions
c) we do not have to live any one else's values other than the ones we come up with through our relationship with Christ.
d) if we feel it is right then we don't have to answer to anyone else's opinions

The things I used within the song that I learned from my book are having two words within the title that start with the same letter, I used the verse/chorus format, the title is in the first line of the chorus, the reason for the song is evident from the beginning, and the song leads up to the end. I had written it one way, and then had to do some changing after I read about not making the rhymes so obvious to keep the listener engaged in the meaning and not on the rhymes. I have a lot more learning to do, and this lyric only employs some of what I have learned so far. It felt good to write, and to know something about what I was doing.

Fighting For The Freedom

Verse:
I feel the desire to do what's right
Though those around me tell me I am wrong
I feel so immersed in this daily fight
for the freedom that only comes from the Lord
I'll lead down the hard road, and not blindly follow along

Chorus:
I'm fighting for the freedom to be me
Stepping out with courage to choose for myself
Don't tell me who I should or shouldn't be
I'm heeding the things my Savior has taught
And that is all the direction that I need

Verse:
I've been reading the Word, and praying to my Father
He knows me so much better than I know myself
He shows me things I could be doing better
And because I want to grow within his love
I do my best while relying on his help

Chorus:
I'm fighting for the freedom to be me
Stepping out with courage to choose for myself
Don't tell me who I should or shouldn't be
I'm heeding the things my Savior has taught
And that is all the direction that I need

Verse:
I'm not perfect but my sins have been forgiven
I can't do it on my own except by grace
I love him so I'll do what I believe in
I'll learn about and do the things he's said
So he'll know me on that day I see his face.

Chorus:
I'm fighting for the freedom to be me
Stepping out with courage to choose for myself
Don't tell me who I should or shouldn't be
I'm heeding the things my Savior has taught
And that is all the direction that I need

4 comments:

  1. I really don't know very much about verse, so I can't critique, except that you have a few typos One in the 2nd verse and one in the Chorus the 2nd time, both on the 4th line. Those don't really matter, but they are things that I notice. I read it out loud since I don't know the tune and it sounded good. Also, the message is right on and very needed, not just for the youth, but for those adults who have never really grown up completely. I would buy it!!

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  2. I need to have feedback to get better, so thank you Kellie. I fixed the things you brought to my attention. Thanks

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  3. Love it Elisa!! Can't wait to hear it sung by your beautiful voice!!!

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  4. You need to sing it on camera and post it!

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